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The Plot Daisy

Saturn Ring Blues
When I was in grad school I had an instructor for one of the writing workshops who really didn't like my stuff.  She gave me a "B" on "Miss Hathaway's Spider."  She didn't think it was funny.  Of course, I despised her and all of her opinions *g*.

She did give a lesson one day, though, that has stuck with me ever since and helped me considerably in the writing of stories.  She said that most folks think of stories in a linear fashion, with one event following another, but that's not a good way to write them.  She suggested that a different diagram makes more sense, the plot daisy.  The concept is simple, it's just an extension of Chekhov's gun on the mantle in act one that has to be used by act five, except that it's more than just the gun.  Almost EVERYTHING that is introduced early has to come back later.  That's why they are in the early part of the story in the first place.

So a plot daisy of the movie Gattaca might look something like this (my handwriting really does look this bad on a board):
 


At the center is whatever themes you want to ascribe to the story.  The petals on daisy are plot points that are introduced early and come back later.  An obvious one is labeled "right handed men" on the diagram.  Early in the story, Vincent gives a urine sample to the doctor.  The doc makes a comment about the quality of Vincent's "equipment."  He says that he wished his parents had ordered one like that for him.  At the time, this scene seems like a little joke (and a fairly crude one at that), although it goes along with the world building of a society heavily invested in genetic control.  But it turns out this scene is critical to setting up the end.  When Vincent has finally overcome all the obstacles involved in hiding his own inferior genetic makeup, he's ready to board the spaceship that will send him to Titan, but the company has instituted a new policy Vincent didn't anticipate, and he has to give one more urine sample before he leaves.  He is only a few steps away from reaching his goal, but now he'll be discovered!  He gives the urine sample to the doc while making a sort of speech justifying what he now knows is a failed attempt to escape his genetic destiny.  The doctor tests the urine, which shows who Vincent really is.  That should end the movie on a down note.  Vincent failed.  Instead, though, the doctor says, "For future reference, right handed men don't hold it with their left. Just one of those things. "  He lets Vincent board the ship.

That scene wrenches every event in the story around.  You realize that the doctor knew Vincent was a fake from the very beginning (the doctor has a son who isn't "everything they promised he would be," so he's sympathetic to Vincent's attempt).

It turns out, though, that there are numerous other petals on the daisy.  The swimming competition between Vincent and Anton when they are young comes back.  The comment Vincent makes about getting Irene's hair tested ("A breeze caught it," he says as he drops it), comes back later.  The image of the incinerator/shower that opens the story also ends it.  The scrubbing of body to get rid of the excess skin cells is repeated.  Even Jerome's suicide is set up (he explains how his back was broken and then says, "If at first you don't succeed, try, try again").

In a literature class, we used to call a lot of this foreshadowing.  Now, I see that whatever I want to be important in the end, I need to get in early.  Everything on the first page is there to set up the last page.

When I get stuck on what's going on in my story, or when I'm revising to unify, I think of the plot daisy.  It helps.

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rosefox
Feb. 29th, 2008 03:38 pm (UTC)
I had to squint to figure out that what I thought said "butter" actually said "brother".

That's a pretty cool concept. I like it.
jimvanpelt
Mar. 1st, 2008 04:55 pm (UTC)
My handwriting truly isn't good, although if you click on the photo (on my computer at least) a clearer version of it pops up.
ramblin_phyl
Feb. 29th, 2008 04:52 pm (UTC)
Love it! Going to try to apply this to the 2nd draft of the blinking WIP that's a total mess.
agilebrit
Feb. 29th, 2008 05:35 pm (UTC)
This might help one of my stories suck less...
silk_noir
Feb. 29th, 2008 06:34 pm (UTC)
Thanks for this!
jeffsoesbe
Feb. 29th, 2008 08:51 pm (UTC)
I like that plot daisy. Circling around from the beginning to the end is something I'm trying to consciously do in my stories now (and was a big lesson at Viable Paradise).

Minor nit: It's spelled "GattAca". I only nit it because all the letters are from the genetic code, so the A is important. And it is an *excellent* movie, one that never seems to get as much out-and-out praise and admiration from science fiction or movie fans as it should. I think I'll watch it again tonight!

Thanks!

- yeff
jimvanpelt
Mar. 1st, 2008 04:56 pm (UTC)
I fixed it in the post. My mistake on the whiteboard, though, is forever *g*.
jeffsoesbe
Mar. 1st, 2008 07:13 pm (UTC)
Naah. A little PhotoShop action and your reputation is safe!

- yeff
kmarkhoover
Mar. 1st, 2008 04:38 pm (UTC)
I've never heard of a plot daisy before. That's pretty cool. So if you don't mind I'll steal this idea from you and use it for myself when the need arises.... :)
jimvanpelt
Mar. 1st, 2008 04:58 pm (UTC)
Steal away!

It's weird that I know a lot in theory about plot (an ill spent middle age, I'm afraid), but I really only consciously apply the plot daisy and my understanding of conflict (someone wants something, something stands in the way, and something of value is to be gained or lost) when I write stories.
(Anonymous)
Jun. 26th, 2008 06:21 am (UTC)
chekhov
I think you mean Chekhov. (П.А. Чехов).

Chekov is the guy from Star Trek.
rymrytr
Feb. 6th, 2011 07:43 am (UTC)


As you have indicated, catching the Reader early is important. I recently read a short story (SF) that starts out somewhat vague, but I keep reading. In the middle part, I saw some 'things' which seemed confusing, but a tiny bit intriguing, so I stuck with it. The ending revealed all and made all those first things into "aha's"... Have you seen any like this?


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